Lost, can't see the trail, just snow and icy whiteness. So deathly cold, my legs won't move, can't move, must rest now. Christmas, the tree is shroud-like white, but the blanket, the one with the small pink rabbits covers me--the last sleep.
This is for the weekend http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/: write a story in three sentences.
love this!
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Oh, man. This is good.
ReplyDeleteCan you tell we are having a blizzard here? Thanks for your comment.
ReplyDeleteSad, but good.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I guess I was remembering some of those Jack London stories.
ReplyDeleteI just found your blog, and what a wonderful place to inspire more writing (for me, that is). I love it! Keep up the love of words for all of us!
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Thank you, Meri. Writing can be magical, what would we do without the internet and the encouragement others give us?
DeletePerfectly set scene.
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I love the image of the blanket at the end, whether it's a hallucination or the snow is impossible to say. Very Jack London!
ReplyDeleteThanks for joining up for this one, Natalie. I've read this a few times now and I like it a lot. Your 3 sentences convey so much of the desperation of the situation. 'So deathly cold, my legs won't move, can't move, must rest now' -- the body is giving up but you also capture beautifully how the mind is also weakening. I hope you'll be back foe our weekly challenge on Monday.
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DeleteBrutal way to go...at least there was a good memory to carry him/her to the end
ReplyDeleteI had in mind how we love our baby blankets; how comforting they are. Thank you for your comment.
ReplyDeleteI felt cold and sleepy just reading this - nice creation of atmosphere!
ReplyDeleteThe atmosphere is here outside, 2 feet of snow! Inspiration.
Deletevery good i like this one its so cold! :)
ReplyDeleteLiving here in Colorado, makes one think about what it would be like to get caught in a snowstorm with no hope of rescue.
ReplyDeleteYikes! What a way to go but peaceful? Loved the imagined blanket at the end.
ReplyDeleteIt reminds me of the fairy tale about the girl with the matches...so sad. Was it Andersen? I don't remember.
ReplyDelete"The Little Match Girl" by Hans Christian Andersen. Did I read this story a long, long time ago? The stories are eerily similar, Christmas tree included. Wikipedia has the whole story, illustration as well. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteso haunting. wonderful job!!
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