Friday, March 16, 2012

LOST

Where are you my friend?
In the confused labyrinth
of your mind,
I cannot find you.


Are my visits pointless?
One more try. . .
"I love you."


The answer--
three squeezes
from your hand.




Write a story in 33 words.
Do not use 'lost' in the story.

http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/
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22 comments:

  1. sightsnbytesMarch 16, 2012 at 5:18 PM

    very nice work! nice blog as well!!

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  2. GeneMarch 16, 2012 at 5:19 PM

    Not as lost as one might think. There is still hope.

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  3. boogulooMarch 16, 2012 at 5:20 PM

    Never give up, they always hear you.

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  4. barbaraMarch 16, 2012 at 5:49 PM

    I remember asking my Mom to squeeze my hand and how it felt when she did.

    lovely.

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  5. GrayMarch 16, 2012 at 5:55 PM

    This hits close. You captured it perfectly.

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  6. loverofwordsMarch 16, 2012 at 7:11 PM

    Thanks, all. I had a wonderful friend who died of Alzheimer's
    I still miss her.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 16, 2012 at 8:11 PM

    This is lovely, and just a little sad. Nicely done.

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  8. becca givensMarch 17, 2012 at 9:46 AM

    Bittersweet and poignant piece. Nicely done!

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  9. The Gal HerselfMarch 17, 2012 at 9:46 AM

    Oh, this is very sweet and dear. A powerful use of your 33 words!

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  10. loverofwordsMarch 17, 2012 at 11:01 AM

    Thanks, Gal. I also enjoy your writing.

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  11. MOVMarch 17, 2012 at 12:45 PM

    Nice piece. And I love the new look of your blog! is that Sweden?

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  12. loverofwordsMarch 17, 2012 at 12:52 PM

    Thank you, MOV. Yes, Stockholm. Thought I would write a piece on memory genes or do we have them for places we have seen for the first time but feels as if we have been there before.

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  13. AnonymousMarch 17, 2012 at 2:04 PM

    Sweet and a little sad at the same time. Thank you for sharing.

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  14. AnonymousMarch 17, 2012 at 7:25 PM

    I felt so sad for the persona in this poem. And yet, at the end, hopeful. At the beginning, I thought it was someone lost to dementia or Alzheimer's. At the end, I thought there was a chance for getting better.

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  15. karenMarch 17, 2012 at 9:57 PM

    So poignant. For anyone who has experienced a loved one losing their place in the world, this is exactly what it is like.

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  16. AnonymousMarch 18, 2012 at 5:06 AM

    Thanks for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. I'm impressed with how much you got in in just 33 words. From despair to hope. It's really nicely done. Hope you'll come back on Monday.

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  17. Tara R.March 18, 2012 at 6:20 AM

    A look into a troubled mind with tenderness and love. Nicely done.

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  18. Whispering ThoughtsMarch 18, 2012 at 10:54 AM

    Glad to see a post ending on positive note. The sad tones turning to hopeful ones.
    Regards,
    Ruby

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  19. UnknownMarch 18, 2012 at 3:32 PM

    Congratulations! You won the Versatile Blogger award . Stop by my blog to collect.

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  20. LeanneMarch 18, 2012 at 8:15 PM

    Wow!!! I love this! Well done

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  21. AmeliaMarch 18, 2012 at 11:22 PM

    How beautiful.

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  22. AmandaMarch 19, 2012 at 5:53 AM

    Beautiful and sad.

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