Friday, March 16, 2012

LOST

Where are you my friend?
In the confused labyrinth
of your mind,
I cannot find you.


Are my visits pointless?
One more try. . .
"I love you."


The answer--
three squeezes
from your hand.




Write a story in 33 words.
Do not use 'lost' in the story.

http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/

22 comments:

  1. very nice work! nice blog as well!!

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  2. Not as lost as one might think. There is still hope.

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  3. Never give up, they always hear you.

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  4. I remember asking my Mom to squeeze my hand and how it felt when she did.

    lovely.

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  5. This hits close. You captured it perfectly.

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  6. Thanks, all. I had a wonderful friend who died of Alzheimer's
    I still miss her.

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  7. This is lovely, and just a little sad. Nicely done.

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  8. Bittersweet and poignant piece. Nicely done!

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  9. Oh, this is very sweet and dear. A powerful use of your 33 words!

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  10. Thanks, Gal. I also enjoy your writing.

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  11. Nice piece. And I love the new look of your blog! is that Sweden?

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  12. Thank you, MOV. Yes, Stockholm. Thought I would write a piece on memory genes or do we have them for places we have seen for the first time but feels as if we have been there before.

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  13. Sweet and a little sad at the same time. Thank you for sharing.

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  14. I felt so sad for the persona in this poem. And yet, at the end, hopeful. At the beginning, I thought it was someone lost to dementia or Alzheimer's. At the end, I thought there was a chance for getting better.

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  15. So poignant. For anyone who has experienced a loved one losing their place in the world, this is exactly what it is like.

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  16. Thanks for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. I'm impressed with how much you got in in just 33 words. From despair to hope. It's really nicely done. Hope you'll come back on Monday.

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  17. A look into a troubled mind with tenderness and love. Nicely done.

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  18. Glad to see a post ending on positive note. The sad tones turning to hopeful ones.
    Regards,
    Ruby

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  19. Congratulations! You won the Versatile Blogger award . Stop by my blog to collect.

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  20. Wow!!! I love this! Well done

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