"There's nothing cute about it, " he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She agreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
Thinking about the deliciousness of her affair, she blotted out his words. Admitting her transgression, saying that the object of her tryst was "cute," hoping finally her misery would end, and it did.
Using Trifecta's prompt, "There's nothing cute about it," add your own addition in 33 words.
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Naughty!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece! I am always amazed at how much can be said in so few words. I think your talent really shines in this post.
ReplyDeleteHmmm. She seems relieved but hanging on to the "deliciousness" of the memory.
ReplyDeleteHard to end it like that, my thought was actually darker.
DeleteHow did it end? HOW did it end?
ReplyDeleteWell, My first thought was that her husband shot her. "The register of his voice indicated decision more than discussion," which began my thoughts in that direction.
Deleteha! I thought she shot HIM!
DeleteEither way, but he was angry and jealous; she was just a tease.
DeleteI think in the original she DISagreed. But I love your take that 'not cute' could mean something different for her than for him here.
ReplyDeleteA gripping story told in so few words.
ReplyDeleteWow -dramatic! Btw, I like your blog banner !
ReplyDeleteThank you. Something about Stockholm is magical.
DeleteOh, wow, never thought of this idea. Dark and well played.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for linking up to Trifextra. Remember, this weekend’s entries are being judged by the Trifecta community, so I hope you were able to cast your votes. (There’s still just over two hours left if not!) Winners will be announced with the Monday post. Hope to see you back then.
ReplyDeleteLove the name of your blog. Look forward to your challenge posts!
ReplyDelete---Damyanti, Co-host A to Z Challenge April 2012
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